To me, it seems like a drunk driver who passed that doesn't sound regretful at all. He tries to say the empathetic phrases of regret talking about the children he orphaned, but the tone throughout the poem does not reflect that at all. It seems more resigned if anything.
Digging deeper, that might be the reason why he was drinking in the first place. It almost makes you sympathetic for his mental health, though you quickly remember the crime he commited.
This piece is beautiful in its complexity. Love it.
Thank you so much Chris. You've had me chopping onions afew times yourself. Like HVR, I choked up on Don't Drink and Drive. I still do just thinking about it
I was reflecting earlier what a strange practice writing is 😊. None of us 'own' language, yet some possess a talent to rearrange words in a particular order.... and make them somehow profoundly their own. I see that in this poem.
Wow. This poem was very intense and emotional. In my youth, I used to be an EMT riding on a volunteer first aid squad, and I've seen the results of such events as you described. This poem will haunt me a bit. Beautifully written and executed.
“Though I may be hard to mourn Let me pass in peace. Sounds like this person has some regret, however does not want to feel it but want to replace with peace because mourning in the present is unbearable!
This piece is uncomfortable in its clarity.
To me, it seems like a drunk driver who passed that doesn't sound regretful at all. He tries to say the empathetic phrases of regret talking about the children he orphaned, but the tone throughout the poem does not reflect that at all. It seems more resigned if anything.
Digging deeper, that might be the reason why he was drinking in the first place. It almost makes you sympathetic for his mental health, though you quickly remember the crime he commited.
This piece is beautiful in its complexity. Love it.
Thank you Reisson. I agree, I think you have to lack a certain empathy to get behind a wheel drunk
"Give salt and water for the wicked"
I just love how you phrased that.
Thank you Ira
So heartbreaking but beautifully written
Thank you Komorebi
Heartbreaking and yet beautiful, Mike. You are someone I strive to be as good as here on Substack. You are incredible.
Thank you so much Chris. You've had me chopping onions afew times yourself. Like HVR, I choked up on Don't Drink and Drive. I still do just thinking about it
So elegantly written, yet such emotional impact. Thank you.
Thank you Suzanne
I was reflecting earlier what a strange practice writing is 😊. None of us 'own' language, yet some possess a talent to rearrange words in a particular order.... and make them somehow profoundly their own. I see that in this poem.
Thank you
Wow. This poem was very intense and emotional. In my youth, I used to be an EMT riding on a volunteer first aid squad, and I've seen the results of such events as you described. This poem will haunt me a bit. Beautifully written and executed.
Thank you Nicholas
This is tragic PancakeSushi. 😔 as always, a perfectly executed piece.
Thank you Regolith
My pleasure. 😊
Intense
Thank you Maria
“Though I may be hard to mourn Let me pass in peace. Sounds like this person has some regret, however does not want to feel it but want to replace with peace because mourning in the present is unbearable!
You are Welcome! Great job!
Thank you Pamela
Though
I had to reread it
It affected me more the second time
Now I have an emptiness
And I'm not sure how to fill it x
I'm sorry it affected you like that Mr T
Don't be
Not your fault
Some things just affect me x
I felt terminator dooms day vibes
Thank you FOWL, but only if the Terminator was a drunk driver
I’m terrible at poetry and sometimes don’t get it but now I see it and 🤯.
My friends father died at the fate of a drunk driver and my uncle was killed by a boy under the influence.
I'm sorry FOWL
I wanted to spread awareness about how tragic it is
It definitely is and you did a great job
Thank you
Your words are deeply moving and beautifully written.
Thank you Aaliya
Almost unbearably sad!
Thank you Mike
A tragic powerful piece. Actions like this often leave nothing but devastation in multiple places, across families and friends.
There's a brutal intensity and finality to it. Superb.
Thank you Gary
Powerful. Destabilizing too.
Thank you Sara