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Elizabeth Schmelzenbach's avatar

Yes, it works.

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Thank you Elizabeth

Lisa πŸŒΏπŸ”πŸ”ŽπŸŒΏ's avatar

Blown away again ...

This hit me and I'm going to write it in my journal if that's ok:

I’m not sure I have the fortitude

To measure my worth

Against a standard

Where I’m not at least a little bitter

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Thank you Lisa. The idea is free, snd I'd be honored if it stayed with you for a time

Quinlin Hewitt's avatar

For @pancakesushi

Temet nosce.

Know thyself, they said.

Then along came PancakeSushi,

proving the soul occasionally wears

the most improbable name in the room.

A breakfast.

A dinner.

A poet.

Somehow all three.

Thank you for reminding us

that wisdom arrives in many disguises,

and coolness rarely bothers

to explain itself.

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Thank you Quinlin!

Eleora's avatar

I’m speechless… Bravo! πŸ™ŒπŸ»βœ¨Thank you for sharing your gift with us! How lucky we are.

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Thank you Eleora

Dorie Snow/ι›ͺ倚丽's avatar

Wow Mike just wow

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Thank you Dorie

Aaronthewriter1 ✍️'s avatar

I love how this speaks on forgiveness without pretending we stop being human. Sometimes healing is not having no bitterness at all. Sometimes healing is admitting there is still a small smudge there, but choosing not to let it become the whole story.

That is magic to me.

To speak peace into something that once hurt. To let the river carry what we no longer need to drag behind us. To trust that the words will reach whoever they are meant to reach.

Some things do not need to be over-explained. They just need to be felt.

This was felt deeply.

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Thank you Aaron!

Aria Ligi's avatar

Well-done.

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Thank you Aria

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Dipti  Vyas's avatar

Mike,

I kept returning to the word magic. Not because it promises transformation, but because it recognizes something we know instinctively: words can mend or ruin, heal or hurt. A sentence spoken in love can alter the course of a life; another, uttered carelessly, can remain lodged in memory for decades.

But what moved me most is that the poem turns this power inward.

β€œI’ll say these words:

I know, I always knew

I figured it out

And it’s okay.”

How difficult those last four words can be.

Not because the wound was small.

Not because the mistake vanished.

But because there comes a moment when carrying the story hurts more than letting it become a story.

I loved the ballast metaphor. We speak so often of what life does to us, forgetting the weights we polish, protect, and call identity. Many people say it’s okay without believing it. The magic is not in the words alone. It arrives when something within finally loosens its gripβ€”when forgiveness ceases to be an argument and becomes a way of being.

And perhaps that is why your ending feels so right:

β€œTo explain magic is to ruin

Part of what makes it work.”

Some truths are not explained into existence. They are spoken softly, sometimes shakily, until one day they are simply true.

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Thank you Dipti. I can't help but feel that the traditions of speaking things, situations into existence has some form of validity to it, at minimum insofar as each of our mental state/internal state is the first in bringing change: it's small, imperceptible. But it's inescapably intrinsic to the process of evolution, the same as it is with the mother repeating a mental checklist walking through a parking lot, or an athlete talking themselves into calming down on the court, or amping themselves up.

Dipti  Vyas's avatar

I think you are touching upon something ancient here, Mike.

Words do not always create reality in the crude sense we often imagine. But they shape the one place from which all realities are first encountered: consciousness itself.

A mother whispering stay alert, an athlete repeating I can, a grieving soul saying I will survive; these are not mere sounds hurled at an indifferent universe. They are small acts of alignment. The inner world leaning, ever so slightly, toward a different possibility.

And perhaps that is how all transformation begins: not with mountains moving, but with perception loosening its grip on what it thought was fixed.

Maybe that is why prayers survive,

why mantras outlive empires,

why a single sentence spoken with conviction

can become a bridge across despair.

Not because words bend reality.

But because, sometimes,

they remind us of the one who is listening.

And that listener has always been larger

than fear.

Nicholas Samuel Stember's avatar

Love this poem

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Thank you Nicholas

Whispering Pirate's avatar

I’m running out of energy for hints I don’t know for me or another

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For whoever needs to hear πŸ™‚πŸ™ƒ

Quinlin Hewitt's avatar

πŸ˜”Sheesh

V S Uma's avatar

Great writing ✍️ as always πŸ‘ŒπŸ½

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Thank you V S

Willow's avatar

Wow, 🀍

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Thank you Willow

Christopher Van Name's avatar

I will now, forever think of this poem when I think of magic.

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Thank you Christopher!

AdriΓ£o Pereira da Cunha's avatar

There’s something quietly powerful in this poem, the way it treats words as a kind of fragile magic we carry inside us. It feels like someone trying to speak forgiveness into existence, even as they admit how hard that actually is. I love how the imagery shifts between shadows, thoughts, and the weight of old mistakes β€” it captures so well how our minds replay things we wish we could undo. What struck me most is the honesty about bitterness: not denying it, not pretending to be above it, just acknowledging it as part of being human. The poem moves gently toward release, not in a dramatic way, but in that slow, private way real forgiveness often happens. And the ending is beautiful β€” the idea that some words only work when spoken softly, without explanation, like a small spell meant for the right person to hear.

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Thank you APC, I always appreciate your thoughts